Random Writing Rant #1 – The Hero’s Nostrils Did What?!

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Profile of serious young man touching his nose bridge and thinking with eyes closed. Isolated side view on white background.Ok, so I am the first to admit that I’m not a super technical writer yet. But there are certain things I read which make me stop in my tracks and put a book down, unable to read another word until I figure out what the hell the author meant. Today’s example is, “His nostrils twitched and he gave her a long moment to absorb that by leaving, he was getting what he wanted. He wasn’t obeying.”

It was the fact that his nostrils twitched, of all things. The online definitions of twitch is: “give or cause to give a short, sudden jerking or convulsive movement.” I understand that muscles twitch – as in, I went for a long run and at the end my muscles twitched in protest. And I guess the muscles in your nose could do the same. But if you think about it, doesn’t that just seem weird? It’s as if the hero has a sneeze waiting to happen but it never does? Or does your mind suddenly remember Tabatha in the old television show Bewitched? Maybe he’s going to cast a spell because he left his magic wand at home. I’d rather a muscle in his jawline twitched, or an eyebrow twitched up in astonishment, but his nostrils? Dude – get a Kleenex, you’re about to blow. And you look silly.

Maybe if I was having a different kind of day, this wouldn’t have bothered me as much. But because it did, twitching nostrils became my random writing rant of the day.


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